Rate The Lead Wolf Above's Biography

5/10

You could use some more sentences about like, what the pack does, or who her mate is, or something like that, and how she gets along with the other wolves!

@ predy! # 11351 

thank you for the tips. it was very helpful. 

4/10

Aah! I'm so sorry for being so harsh!

I'm sorry for being such a harsh criticizer- you don't have to do any of this, as they are only suggestions!

But- here are some suggestions:

Rather than explaining what a lead wolf is, and what a lead wolf does, perhaps give her a backstory?

You should make it longer! Lure the reader in, what makes your wolf interesting?

Whats your wolf's personality? You should maybe explain that when doing something like a 1st person perspective.

oops- somebody already replied, sorry!

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Ahah, I know mine isn't the best, please give me tips on what I should fix :)

This is her.

7/10 I liked how it was like an interview and some things confused me.

7/10 

nice bio 

could i ask the person below me rate's Koi's bio ? wolvden.com 

just hasn't had the chance to improve Magic's bio. 

6/10 some of the sentences were short and kind of bland. 

7/10. Okay, sorry if I seem harsh, but I'm giving constructive criticism for the things I did and didn't like to help you improve - but obviously you don't need to apply this or even like,, think about it lol, just my opinion. ^v^
Alright. It was kind of short and seemed maybe slightly abrupt? And the way it was with a "You" perspective (idk what that's called...) but in past-tense was slightly odd.
However, I did like the descriptions, such as Honey's face and the scent of the grassland. It gives a good insight into Honey's personality. Overall, pretty good! :)

Here's my lead wolf, her bio is below the reference sheet. Constructive criticism is appreciated, and I don't mind if you're somewhat harsh, as long as you aren't rude. :)

9/10

Love it. It's an interesting backstory. I don't have much on a criticism - of any kind - but I do wonder if the bio's going to change as she ages? Like when she has a litter, or when she (you) has decided who'll be her heir.

Anyways, here's Scathos |:| Wolvden